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Six Sentence Sunday

April 1, 2012

I’m playing around with story that is set in the same world as Knightly Desire. I’m not sure if it is going to work out though. We’ll see. Anyway, here are the first six sentences from it.

Simon breathed in the tangy sea air and smiled. It was good to be home.

He stepped out of his apartment and headed south, weaving his way through the crowded cobblestone streets of Arcova City toward the docks. He cut across the market, vendors calling out to him as he passed, offering wine and exotic fruit, carpets and glassware. The succulent smell of roasting meat wafted through the air and made his mouth water.

He rolled his shoulders, missing the weight of his armor and his sword, the feel of them on his body.


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26 Comments leave one →
  1. April 1, 2012 6:58 am

    I love this opening 6. Nice descriptions of the city and makes me want to know why he doesn’t have his armor.

  2. April 1, 2012 7:34 am

    Oh snap, what a great opening six! I love it.

  3. April 1, 2012 7:34 am

    Love this opener! Great way to set a scene.

  4. April 1, 2012 7:50 am

    I hope this story gets to live on – loved how you brought us into his world in this opening 🙂

  5. April 1, 2012 8:08 am

    Wonderful scene setter in this opening. Just missing a bit of tension?

  6. Gem permalink
    April 1, 2012 8:54 am

    You’ve really brought in all the senses–sight, sound, mouth watering smells. Great set up for a new story.

  7. April 1, 2012 9:16 am

    Very sensory–I was right there with him. (ha, don’t I wish? ;)) Nice six!

  8. April 1, 2012 9:22 am

    Sounds pretty awesome to me. Can’t wait to see more!

  9. April 1, 2012 9:26 am

    Wonderful use of setting here! I’m pulled right into his world, and I palpably sense his discomfort at returning home without his steel. More! 🙂

  10. April 1, 2012 9:43 am

    The scene comes alive with all of the sensory details you’ve included. I like that you’ve also included a couple of sentences about Simon, so we know he is in a moment of personal change. 🙂

  11. April 1, 2012 9:55 am

    Vivid description that pulled me right in. Great six!

  12. April 1, 2012 10:01 am

    Really lays out the setting and mood of the story in so few sentences. Descriptive Six, Lisa. Extremely enjoyable.

  13. April 1, 2012 10:27 am

    Great opening Lisa! I love the description, keep going! We need to know more!

  14. April 1, 2012 10:31 am

    Love the description too, you’ve got action mixed in with sensory descriptions other than sight and already a hint that something is different about his life right now (no armor), which then makes us wonder (and keep reading) — why no armor?

  15. Eleri Stone permalink
    April 1, 2012 10:34 am

    I really hope this one works out. Would love to read more.

  16. April 1, 2012 11:01 am

    Awesome beginning, Lisa. Thanks for including such a delicious photo. 🙂

  17. April 1, 2012 11:04 am

    Very nice description. Draws me immediately into the character and the surroundings.

  18. April 1, 2012 1:06 pm

    Mmm tasty. That conjures up a very intertesting city scape.

    Also, good grief that young man has less body hair than I do! Isn’t he smooooth!

  19. Ursula Grey permalink
    April 1, 2012 1:19 pm

    Excellent descriptive six ~ I feel as if I’m there with him…definitely want to be! He sounds like a sexy fellow:-) Very nice!

  20. April 1, 2012 3:04 pm

    Awesome description…and now I’m hungry! (laughs)

  21. April 1, 2012 4:13 pm

    Excellent six-very smooth, almost visceral. And then I saw the picture and everything I was going to say left my brain. Thanks for the delicious visual.

  22. April 1, 2012 5:25 pm

    Love the opening, I could smell the ocean and then all the detailed description of the market – I was *there*! Terrific snippet!

  23. April 1, 2012 6:10 pm

    That’s a great opening. You have me interested right off the bat. Simon sounds like someone I want to get to know better. 🙂

  24. April 1, 2012 8:09 pm

    I like it. Keep going and see where it ends up. 🙂

  25. April 1, 2012 10:53 pm

    Nice opening. And that guy in the picture…..*drool*

  26. April 3, 2012 5:49 am

    Now I’m hungry. 😀

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