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Six Sentence Sunday

March 27, 2011

There is this vampire story that I’ve had in mind for some time now. I have an inkling of an idea of how I would want it to go, but so far only one scene has come to me. I wrote it out one night and put it aside. I found it again today when I was looking for something for to share this week.

It’s not as sexy as some of the things I usually post, but I think it has potential.

The scent of her blood filled his head, driving him wild, threatening to send him over the edge. He could feel the frenzy coming on, the red mist descending over his vision and he fought to keep it at bay.

She stirred in his arms and anguish pierced his long dead heart. She was dying. Dying and she would not let him save her. He looked down at her pale face, felt her labored breathing and knew he was losing her forever.

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42 Comments leave one →
  1. March 27, 2011 8:23 am

    Nope, he’s going to have to save her. I like him too much. He gets what he wants! *stamps foot*

    Great six!

    gem

  2. Dawne Prochilo permalink
    March 27, 2011 8:26 am

    WOW- talk about emotions- great Six Lisa… I can feel his pain and loss

  3. March 27, 2011 8:30 am

    This is sooooo gooooood. It has its own sex appeal 😉 Great six!

  4. March 27, 2011 8:31 am

    He better save her or I’m going to stake him!

  5. March 27, 2011 8:39 am

    It does have great potential! Keep going. I need to know what happens next! 🙂

  6. Graylin Fox permalink
    March 27, 2011 8:43 am

    Save her! and write this story so we can keep seeing posts from it each week. Please?

  7. March 27, 2011 8:56 am

    So full of tension and heartache. I’m with the others, you should write it!

  8. March 27, 2011 9:13 am

    Beautiful. The emotions are poignant; the description wonderful. You MUST continue with this.

    (And I am oddly turned on by that glimpse of lovely curved back and mmm-mmm shoulders!)

  9. March 27, 2011 9:22 am

    Loved it. Very beautiful and touching. Plus the pic was yummy! LOL

  10. March 27, 2011 9:24 am

    Awww! *sniffle*

  11. March 27, 2011 9:38 am

    Maybe not sexy BUT very sensual!!!!!

  12. March 27, 2011 10:06 am

    Love the tension he wrestles with! Lovely sensual imagery.

  13. Heather Thurmeier permalink
    March 27, 2011 10:14 am

    I love this six. You should get busy writing more of this!

  14. March 27, 2011 10:15 am

    Nooo this makes me sad! Make him save her!

  15. March 27, 2011 10:16 am

    Fantastic six! Also love the pic of the man’s back. I have a major thing for man’s backs.

  16. March 27, 2011 10:19 am

    So deliciously angsty! Yes, yes, please dust this one off and give it another go. In six sentences you already managed to tug on deep emotion.

  17. March 27, 2011 10:28 am

    Great emotion-packed scene, and great teaser! Can’t wait to find out what he decides.

  18. March 27, 2011 10:38 am

    Oh this is excellent ! I am into vamp kid lit at the moment – and vampires in general. Not sexy is good too ya know 😀

  19. March 27, 2011 11:02 am

    I love the emotions in this. Potential, indeed!

  20. March 27, 2011 11:11 am

    Great emotions there. Sometimes I like to see a peak of the character outside the sex scenes. This is fantastic.

  21. March 27, 2011 11:29 am

    Sooo much potential. Yes. Definitely write it.

  22. March 27, 2011 11:39 am

    Not a fan of vampires, but this is very emotive and makes me want to read more!

    Great job 🙂

  23. March 27, 2011 11:51 am

    I was holding my breath through the whole six! The emotions, the pain..wow! Nicely done.

  24. March 27, 2011 12:18 pm

    Wow is right. that packs quite an emotional punch. Fabulous six!

  25. Kerrianne permalink
    March 27, 2011 12:41 pm

    So emotional! Great 6!

  26. March 27, 2011 12:47 pm

    Save her.

  27. March 27, 2011 1:05 pm

    I don’t care what the girl said. Do something!

  28. March 27, 2011 1:50 pm

    The last two things I’ve read from you have been very emotional. I LOVE it! 🙂 I can really feel the conflict he is feeling, whether to save her, or watch her die. Fabulous!!

  29. March 27, 2011 2:12 pm

    Wow, you left me hanging here…I want more….

  30. March 27, 2011 2:47 pm

    Very emotional six. Nicely done.

  31. March 27, 2011 2:52 pm

    Oh my, with that much angst, he just has to sink fangs in her. Love it.

  32. March 27, 2011 3:52 pm

    Oh, that’s so sad! (and a really nice pic too!)

  33. March 27, 2011 4:18 pm

    But he won’t let her die. I just know it.

  34. March 27, 2011 6:06 pm

    Powerful sometimes outdoes sexy in my book any day.

  35. March 27, 2011 7:09 pm

    This is FABULOUS! Can’t wait to see more.

  36. March 27, 2011 7:52 pm

    This is the most powerful six I’ve seen you post. Great job!

  37. March 27, 2011 8:36 pm

    Definite work on this–his pain and regret and frustration really shone through!

  38. March 27, 2011 9:38 pm

    Just do it! She needs you. We need you. Lisa, you need to finish this story. I want – wait – I need more!

    😀

  39. March 27, 2011 9:46 pm

    It can’t end like this! But if/when he saves her against her wishes, there’ll be hell to pay. Great six!

  40. March 28, 2011 12:29 am

    He can’t let her die!

  41. March 28, 2011 4:02 pm

    Keep writing, keep writing! Love vampire stuff and this sounds fab 🙂

  42. March 29, 2011 12:04 am

    Definitely the start of something very very good.

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