Six Sentence Sunday
April 17, 2011
As many of you may know, I had the pleasure of participating in Jessica Subject’s Blogoversary. This week’s six are the opening lines to the ultra-short story I wrote for the occasion.
The space between us is minimal, though highly charged. Just an inch. Less than that. The slightest movement and we would be touching. I can feel the heat of him through my suddenly very restrictive clothes, sense the steady rhythm of his breath. Centimeters. Millimeters. Micrometers between us and yet he is so far away.
If you’d like, you can read the whole thing here: THE SPACE BETWEEN US. Leave a comment and be entered to win a copy of Sculpting a Demon!
Be sure to check out all the other enticing excerpts this week at the OFFICIAL SITE.
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Oooh… Love it. Girl, get rid of the restrictive clothes!
I can feel her longing and need. Great writing, Lisa! I’ll definitely read to find out what happens next
Oh, that is very sexy and intense. All those short sentences make me feel like she’s panting. Awesome!
Oh nice snippet! It was captivating. Completely pulled me into the moment.
Wonderful description – can feel her yearning.
Mmm. The tension is electric. Love it!
Great snippet and great story!
fantastic snippet!
good point about the short sentences – so close and so far – why is that?
Fantastic opening! And one of my favorite pictures, too.
You know I love it….
Oh, Baby! That is sex on a stick!
Very vivid. Fantastic six.
Lisa, I absolutely loved this story! Everyone should read it if they haven’t already. Very emotional piece.
OMG! Talk about sexual tension here! This was a FABULOUS Six!
Very evocative writing!
You’ve said so much in so few words. Very clean and pure. I love it!
Oh, I so know that feeling! Great six!
great beats to this
can feel it happening
Very poetic!
Very well done! Who hasn’t felt like this at some point? But I’ve never seen it so well expressed in words.
Wow. Love every word. And who says distance matters.
Loved this. Had to go read the rest of the story–beautiful.
Very beautiful.
delicious tension!
Oh, I love that description.
Oh, I like this. Very vivid!
Loved the story and this snippet makes it all the more inviting.
Lovely! I’m not surprised–I always love your snippets! I gotta get a book from you! Now, where is my credit card!
that’s a beautiful description.. love it so much..
I feel the electricity!